Brooke Aarons can’t get to college fast enough. Leaving behind her small town life, she intends to transform herself into a brilliant psychologist with no distractions along the way. But when she finds herself on a double date with the school’s star football player – and worse, enjoying it – Brooke has to wonder if she’s the one who needs her head examined.
James Cartwright’s easy life, endless bucks, and long line of willing girls should make him a non-starter for Brooke, but as she learns, the psychology behind a bad crush is a whole lot messier of a subject. Maybe Plato was right. Maybe love is a serious mental disease. If so, Brooke doesn’t have long to find a cure before James’ attention proves to be a terminal condition.
Miss Riki’s Review:
I’m always on the lookout for new authors and I love discovering indie published and self published works, so when I was offered this book in exchange for an honest review, I was excited to see what it was all about. However, billed as laugh-out-loud chick-lit, it never quite met my expectations.
What stands out immediately is that the writing itself is pretty rough. There are numerous grammatical and spelling errors throughout the book (including a couple of instances where the main character’s name was misspelled) that could easily be fixed with some good editing.
Another huge turnoff for me was the dialogue. The dialogue throughout is stilted and awkward, with a very random way of attributing the speaker. The author switches between proper dialogue tags and a sort of informal style of attribution (For example “Brooke: blah blah blah.” “James: blah blah blah.”). Sometimes she even mixes the two styles within the same conversation, and it is quite distracting. When that is not occurring, there is an alarming lack of tags at all, making it very difficult to discern who is speaking in a book with a large cast of characters.
As for story, the pacing was a bit off for me, with the main love interest not even being introduced until after page 50 and then long stretches of time where nothing of any consequence happens in the plot. I had a difficult time connecting with the girls in the story and found them to be pretty one-dimensional and lacking any real background to make them realistic.
Overall, I think this book just needs a lot of work. There are moments of funny dialogue and some cute scenes between James and Brooke, but they are buried in a lot of words in need of editing for clarity.